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==Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment==
[[File:Sciences humaines.svg|40px]] This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available [[Wikipedia:Wiki_Ed/UC_Denver/PBHL_2052_(Spring_2018)|on the course page]]. Student editor(s): [[User:Zakira seidu|Zakira seidu]]. Peer reviewers: [[User:Viviansayavong|Viviansayavong]], [[User:Victoriali2|Victoriali2]], [[User:Samone H|Samone H]].
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==Neutrality==
There are some points in this article that don't seem to be completely neutral in tone. IN other words, it seems to imply that adequate birth control is not being used in Africa and this should be changed, rather than just relating the current state of what methods of birth control are being used in Africa. Also you use words such as "unfairly," which implies judgment, and there are other points that seem to call for policy action. I would suggest carefully reading back over the article to make sure it is presenting a neutral point of view.
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The section titled "methods" made no mention of anal intercourse as an additional method of contraception in Africa. This is unfortunate considering the practice as it effects the choice to possibly reject other forms of contraception and, of course, the impact of anal intercourse on the transmission of disease. This is a glaring omission is light of much published scientic research on the subject.
I suggest using data from the World Health Organization regarding the use of anal intercourse as contraception in Africa and it's effects on health in the region. <span style="font-size: smaller;" class="autosigned">— Preceding [[Wikipedia:Signatures|unsigned]] comment added by [[Special:Contributions/71.191.143.44|71.191.143.44]] ([[User talk:71.191.143.44|talk]]) 13:39, 18 July 2013 (UTC)</span><!-- Template:Unsigned IP --> <!--Autosigned by SineBot-->
==Revising this article==
I am currently revising this article for a Poverty, Justice, and Human Capabilities class that I am taking at Rice University. I have added a lot of additional information, including a lot of statistics on maternal and child mortality rates and reasons why women do not use birth control or why it is not available. I am also planning to include data from studies that have been done on family planning issues in those countries. I have also edited the writing and tried to improve the organization. My sources will consist of scholarly articles and possibly newspaper articles. There will be a full list of the sources I have used in my preliminary research and more information about this project on my home page. Any feedback about this project would be appreciated. Thank you.[[User:Juliannadrew|Juliannadrew]] ([[User talk:Juliannadrew|talk]]) 05:10, 7 November 2013 (UTC)
==Peer Review 1==
Good job adding so many relevant statistics!
I think the “Economic” section of the article would benefit most from some more editing. The source used does not keep a neutral point of view, so it should be removed, or another source presenting a different argument should be added. I think this section’s comprehensiveness is not as high as it could be, so hopefully you can find more sources to add additional, pertinent information. There are a few more problems of neutrality in the article, specifically the introduction. By deleting words like “only” you can create neutrality because then you will be simply stating facts and not making comments on those facts. Finally, the map at the top is somewhat hard to read. I think this problem can be fixed by simply making the image bigger on the page.
Overall, I enjoyed the readability of your article and I thought you did a great job of reorganizing it. [[User:Alardenoit|Alardenoit]] ([[User talk:Alardenoit|talk]]) 05:52, 7 November 2013 (UTC)
==Peer Review 2==
I think you've made many strong and relevant additions to the article. The introductory section is much stronger now.
Overall, the article looks good, but could be proofread again and readability could be improved. Several sections are a bit jumpy so transitions could be made smoother. Some work could be done in making the 'Cultural Attitudes' section more cohesive and consistent. While you are comparing several countries and cultures, you could make it more explicit that that is what you are doing because it is a little confusing to the reader to have so many different perspectives all together.
Additionally, you could work on increasing the number of in-text citations you use. They really help the reader know where the information is coming from and let you use more types of information while still keeping the article neutral because the opinions or statements are given a more explicit source. It is helpful to the reader and they can make their own judgement about the source, seeing explicitly who it came from.
Great job!!
[[User:Cnicholson12|Cnicholson12]] ([[User talk:Cnicholson12|talk]]) 15:56, 7 November 2013 (UTC)
::Hi, I really like the layout of the article. Everything flows really well together, and the transitions are nice. <!-- Template:Unsigned --><small class="autosigned">— Preceding [[Wikipedia:Signatures|unsigned]] comment added by [[User:Samone H|Samone H]] ([[User talk:Samone H#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/Samone H|contribs]]) 04:40, 8 March 2018 (UTC)</small> <!--Autosigned by SineBot-->
I noticed that you mentioned that 30% of all women use birth control, however the link you provided indicated that 30% of women in Ghana use contraceptive. Also it might be helpful to specify where the woman are from. Are you talking about globally or just in Africa.[[User:Zakira seidu|Zakira seidu]] ([[User talk:Zakira seidu|talk]]) 03:28, 15 March 2018 (UTC)
You mentioned something about how most the countries in Africa have not gone through the demographic transition. I also took notes about the increased fertility rates and how children are viewed as economic assert especially to those in the rural areas where farming is their occupation. This a great opportunity to talk about Ansley Coale's precondition for fertility declines.
Also, it seemed you were focusing more on condoms that the rest of the birth control options.
What I would like to contribute to the article is an update on the information provided especially the prevalence since most of the numbers were from 2013.
[[User:Zakira seidu|Zakira seidu]] ([[User talk:Zakira seidu|talk]]) 03:37, 15 March 2018 (UTC)
== Egypt's "Two is enough" policy ==
As Egypt is an African nation I would like to see more information about its "two is enough" child policy. The The “Two Enough” national project that aims to curb the population increase in Egypt sice its facing over poplation. only 4% of Egypt's land is populated by its entire population, causing high density which is roughly 52000 per sq km in some cities/regions.,<ref>{{cite web |title=5.5M door-to-door visits carried out as part of ‘Two Enough’ campaign |url=https://www.egypttoday.com/Article/1/99861/5-5M-door-to-door-visits-carried-out-as-part |website=EgyptToday |access-date=5 December 2021 |date=18 March 2021}}</ref> This project seems to have started in 2019<ref>{{cite web |last1=Masri |first1=Lena |title='Two is enough,' Egypt tells poor families as population booms |url=https://www.reuters.com/article/us-egypt-population-idUSKCN1Q91RJ |website=Reuters |access-date=5 December 2021 |language=en |date=20 February 2019}}</ref>
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== Infidelity ==
I think it is very wrong for someone to cheat on someone really [[Special:Contributions/41.116.46.217|41.116.46.217]] ([[User talk:41.116.46.217|talk]]) 17:01, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
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