Talk:Edith Roosevelt/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Thebiguglyalien (talk · contribs) 23:59, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: HistoryTheorist (talk · contribs) 23:53, 2 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hey! I'd like to review this article. This article might take a bit of time for me to review as it's a bit longer and final exams are coming up for me, but I should have it mostly completed by next Sunday (or maybe even next next Sunday because I might need to take a trek to the Seattle Central library to get some of those juicy print-disabled books). ❤History Theorist❤ 23:53, 2 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It's no problem! I've got plenty of other projects to work on, and it might take me a bit to respond as well. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 00:25, 4 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

If you qualify, you can apply for print disabled. Of course, make sure you're honest because you don't have to verify it in any way. In fact, any random person who needs access to the books could apply for it and it only takes a few days. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 01:44, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Unless having glasses for nearsightedness counts, I'm not print-disabled, unfortunately. ❤History Theorist❤ 20:15, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Update: Final exams are over, so I can really dig into the review. Unfortunately, I wasn't able to find two of the print-disabled books at the library and ILL will be too slow, but I'll do the best with what I've got. ❤History Theorist❤ 19:43, 10 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Good Article review progress box

Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lede

The Roosevelts moved back and forth between New York and Washington as Theodore's political career progressed, and she became a public figure as Theodore's wife as he became a war hero in the Spanish–American War and got elected governor of New York.
- I think this sentence could probably use some syntax changes for readability. While you have lots of options for improving this sentence, I'd suggest switching the clauses as Theodore's political career progressed and The Roosevelts moved back and forth between New York and Washington. Perhaps naming Edith might help, but I'm not so sure about that. This is kind of a nitpick though, so take it or leave it if you like.

Early Lite

Childhood

Looks good. The only thing I would suggest is that you should rephrase and Edith's early schooling took place at the Roosevelt home, as well as etiquette instruction at the Dodsworth School. I would suggest rephrasing that phrase to Template:And Edith's early schooling took place at the Roosevelt home, as well as at the Dodsworth School, where she received etiquette and dancing instruction.

Legacy

Earwig is pretty happy when it comes to copyvios, however, the last paragraph reads almost verbatim from a Time magazine article. Here's the link for your reference. Perhaps you could rephrase the paragraph to avoid such similarity? If there aren't any better alternatives, just let me know.

Historical Evaluation

In the paragraph, you mention Gould. I assume that's Lewis Gould? If so, you should include his first name the first time you introduce his analysis on Edith's views on race.