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A user with 977 edits. Account created on 9 August 2008.
17 December 2023
- 03:3803:38, 17 December 2023 diff hist +15 Kenneth Sylvan Guthrie Previous text had no punctuation after "priest," so that the literal sense of the opening sentence was that W.N. Guthrie issued the translations, not his brother Kenneth. This revision corrects that error..
2 December 2023
- 04:5904:59, 2 December 2023 diff hist 0 m Lyre No hyphen between "lute" and "family" because in this sentence lute functions as an adjective modifying family. The hyphen would be correct in "lute-family instruments" because in that phrase lute-family functions as a single adjective.
23 September 2023
- 03:2803:28, 23 September 2023 diff hist −12 m Thrace →Etymology: Minor change to improve clarity and syntax.
9 July 2023
- 03:5203:52, 9 July 2023 diff hist +1 m Polycrates →Establishment of his power
- 03:5103:51, 9 July 2023 diff hist +5 m Polycrates →Establishment of his power: "cited" is a much more appropriate verb in this context.
7 July 2023
- 04:4204:42, 7 July 2023 diff hist −1 m Eupatridae →Political history: Removed italic formatting applied erroneously to a long passage.
6 May 2023
- 01:4301:43, 6 May 2023 diff hist +2 Abortion in South Dakota →Legislative history: simple copy edit.
29 April 2023
- 01:1201:12, 29 April 2023 diff hist +600 Talk:Strigil →"Marble strigil sarcophagus": new section Tag: New topic
19 January 2023
- 04:1504:15, 19 January 2023 diff hist +27 Endymion (mythology) Fixed the incoherent syntax of the sentence about two different burial places and clarified the remark about "Endymion's love," since his infatuation with the moon goddess has not yet been described.
- 04:0104:01, 19 January 2023 diff hist +13 Opium →History: Added "and medieval" to "in the ancient world" because the list of names immediately following includes Avicenna, a medieval author.
22 November 2022
- 01:1101:11, 22 November 2022 diff hist +7 The Doomed City Resolved the problem of the antecedent of "which" in the opening paragraph by rewriting the first sentence as 2 sentences; changed "name" in the original second sentence to the more precise term "title"; added a clarifying possessive to "Noon Universe"; and repaired the broken parallelism of the last sentence in the opening paragraph.
1 September 2022
- 03:1503:15, 1 September 2022 diff hist +166 Trapped (Icelandic TV series) Fixed broken syntax at the end of the 5th paragraph. Added Netflix release date with URL.
9 July 2022
- 04:4704:47, 9 July 2022 diff hist −3 Mount Fumaiolo →The Springs of the river Tiber: Removed dangling parenthesis.
7 July 2022
- 05:0105:01, 7 July 2022 diff hist +68 Mount Fumaiolo →The Springs of the river Tiber: Normalized punctuation, normalized links to other pages, standardized terms, translated "vene," removed redundancy. (Note that "steeps" is archaic; contemporary English uses "slopes.")
- 04:4404:44, 7 July 2022 diff hist +4 Mount Fumaiolo →The Springs of the river Tiber: Corrected the earlier text, which erroneously implied that the three wolf heads held a single ring. The photo shows otherwise.
6 July 2022
- 04:1304:13, 6 July 2022 diff hist −5 Backgammon →Ancient history: Deleted "from." The verb "span" does not use a preposition -- e.g., the Mid-Hudson Bridge spans the Hudson River, backgammon's popularity spans the millennia from the Bronze Age to the Digital Age.
- 04:0804:08, 6 July 2022 diff hist −152 Backgammon →History: Deleted sentence beginning "The history of the tables game family" and ending "goes back several millennia," since it was both misleading and redundant in context. (Sentences before & after make that clear). Also changed backgammon to lower case, which is correct for all games from chess to tennis.
27 June 2022
- 23:4823:48, 27 June 2022 diff hist +1 m History of Taranto →Foundation and splendour: Corrected the grammar & punctuation of what was originally a run-on sentence at the beginning of the paragraph.
23 May 2022
- 02:4102:41, 23 May 2022 diff hist +35 Adrian Tchaikovsky →Bibliography: Note that various prominent species in the table (spiders, scorpions) are arthropods and not insects. Hence my revision.
22 May 2022
- 23:5823:58, 22 May 2022 diff hist 0 La Bayadère Removed hyphens from a wrongly hyphenated phrase.
- 23:3023:30, 22 May 2022 diff hist −5 Cannabis in Italy →Legalization efforts: Changed "have admitted" -- wrong tense and judgmental language -- to "reported" -- correct tense (i.e., simple past) and neutral language.
4 May 2022
- 02:0402:04, 4 May 2022 diff hist +32 List of pontifices maximi →Pontifices maximi of the Roman Republic: Corrected an obvious misspelling or typo: the name is Folius, not Foslius, as I verified by checking Livy 5.41.3, Rupke (2005) page 1000, Plutarch's Camillus, and the Consular Fasti in CAH vol. 7 Part 2, page 632.
2 April 2022
- 00:2200:22, 2 April 2022 diff hist +3 Monsignor →Current forms of address: Changed "may use the title" to "may be addressed as" since the article makes it crystal clear that monsignor is a form of address and not a title.
- 00:1800:18, 2 April 2022 diff hist −2 Monsignor →Current award classes: Changed "protonotaries" to "protonotary" given the sense and context.
- 00:1700:17, 2 April 2022 diff hist +1 Monsignor Changed "priest" to "priests" since the subject must be plural, given the sense and context.
- 00:1500:15, 2 April 2022 diff hist −1 Monsignor Changed "titles" to "title" since the article refers to "a form of address," not to "forms of address."
1 April 2022
- 01:3901:39, 1 April 2022 diff hist +114 Galactic Odyssey →Synopsis: Changed "concubine" to "companion," since Lady Raire's role is never clarified; she just says that Lord Desroy "caught" her when she fled her planet. Added detail about how Danger manages to crisscross the galaxy.
31 March 2022
- 22:4522:45, 31 March 2022 diff hist −35 Galactic Odyssey →Synopsis: This edit corrects errors & removes excessive detail -- e.g., the damsel in distress is never called Princess Raire -- she's Lady Raire; the "spaceship" is explicitly a "yacht"; and the cats are not survivors but mutated descendants.
- 22:1022:10, 31 March 2022 diff hist +42 Galactic Odyssey Original introduction was misleading -- it wasn't "also known as" Spaceman -- that was in fact the original title, as I remember myself, and as stated on the copyright page of the Tor edition in 1983.
13 March 2022
- 00:3500:35, 13 March 2022 diff hist −131 Patsy Cline discography Simplified syntax, broke up noun stacks, and eliminated unnecessary repetition. Note that the quotation marks conventionally placed around song titles do not make those titles "quotations," so punctuation still goes outside the quotation marks, as in standard American English.
9 March 2022
- 02:3902:39, 9 March 2022 diff hist −1 Hercules in ancient Rome →Temples and topography: "Cultivated" may have been based on a misunderstanding of the English word "cult." Hercules was not "cultivated," but he did receive cult.
15 February 2022
- 05:0405:04, 15 February 2022 diff hist +2 Roberto Saviano →Television: This edit was reverted once for reasons that elude me. The previous citation of the program name was spelled & punctuated incorrectly. I fixed the spelling -- che, not que, since it's Italian -- and restored the parentheses around (ho). My edit matches the rendering of the name on the Italian language page.
14 February 2022
- 04:3604:36, 14 February 2022 diff hist −1 Temple of Jupiter Stator (3rd century BC) →Legend: Previous edit posted by accident. I fixed the text to read "the first of his famous Catiline orations" and cleaned up adjacent vagueness and redundancy.
- 04:3304:33, 14 February 2022 diff hist +32 Temple of Jupiter Stator (3rd century BC) →Legend: "the first of his famous Catiline orations
13 February 2022
- 00:3500:35, 13 February 2022 diff hist +172 Roman law →Early law and jurisprudence: Revised clause about Leges Liciniae for greater precision: "citizen" instead of "individual," "occupy" instead of "possess"; added reference.
12 February 2022
- 20:2820:28, 12 February 2022 diff hist −8 Roman law →Classical Roman law: Corrected nonsensical language referring to assemblies -- "could decide whether war or peace." Now the statement is grammatical and more accurate.
- 20:2320:23, 12 February 2022 diff hist +323 Roman law →Early law and jurisprudence: Rationalized punctuation of first paragraph in section, corrected errors in descriptions of key laws, cited reference. Yes, the reference should be formatted better -- couldn't find template..
- 19:5619:56, 12 February 2022 diff hist +54 Roman law →Early law and jurisprudence: The phrase "Many laws include" was nonsensical. I revised that language to make sense.
31 January 2022
- 21:0421:04, 31 January 2022 diff hist −15 Gomorrah (TV series) Resolved the contradictory text in the opening paragraph. The show ran for five seasons, not four.
- 21:0021:00, 31 January 2022 diff hist −44 Roberto Saviano →Television: Corrected the styling of the 2012 program cited in this paragraph and removed the false link. There's no page on "Quell che (non) ho" in the English language Wikipedia, though there is in the Italian version. Tag: Reverted
- 20:5520:55, 31 January 2022 diff hist 0 Roberto Saviano →Television: Corrected misspelling of "che" in the song title. The language is Italian, not Spanish. Tag: Reverted
- 04:1304:13, 31 January 2022 diff hist −10 Yarn →Etymology: I removed the misplaced italics and the odd possessives, which aren't appropriate in this context. (I've never seen possessives used in this way in English.)
26 January 2022
- 22:0722:07, 26 January 2022 diff hist +7 Janis Joplin →As lead of Big Brother and the Holding Company
25 January 2022
- 00:3800:38, 25 January 2022 diff hist +1 Cherish (The Association song) →Critical reception: Previous phrasing & punctuation were confusing (and incorrect, as I discovered on consulting the source), so I revised this paragraph to more faithfully reflect the review cited.
24 January 2022
- 20:4620:46, 24 January 2022 diff hist +1 Cobra Kai Serial comma
- 20:4420:44, 24 January 2022 diff hist −24 Cobra Kai Simple copy edit of the first several sentences to reduce redundancy and simplify the syntax of the original phrasing, which tended to wander off in many directions before reaching a period.
29 December 2021
- 01:5201:52, 29 December 2021 diff hist +6 John Wilson (filmmaker) →Early life and education: "a capella" still merits an indefinite article (an).
26 December 2021
- 21:5921:59, 26 December 2021 diff hist −6 m In the Cut (film) →Plot: The setting is New York City. "Loo" is British slang. We don't say loo in New York unless we're joking. This is no joke.
23 December 2021
- 01:5301:53, 23 December 2021 diff hist −1 The Eye of the World →Release details: Original text was odd and un-English -- e.g., "two-halves." Revision is phrased in standard English.
18 December 2021
- 22:2822:28, 18 December 2021 diff hist −12 Beforeigners Clean-up of opening paragraph to comply with English grammar, usage, and syntax.