User:Ahmorgan23/Cora Johnstone Best

In the actual article there is a second woman in the title, Audrey Forfar Shippam. I cannot find any information about this woman besides the fact they mountaineered together. I think her name should be deleted from the title.

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Add more to the lead that fully encompasses Best's life instead of just the mountaineering. Adding more detail to all aspects of her life in the lead like her life's journey, what all she has accomplished as well as her work in schools. Making sure to keep the information and tone of the article neutral.

Find more references that are diverse from different sources and types of writing. They said this information is not up to date and I am unsure why because the sources are relatively new and should have the most accurate information. Make sure to properly site the information being added to the article.

Something I want to add from when I was working on peer reviewing other articles is more pictures, to give the readers a better understanding of what Best was teaching. Using Best's photos in the article would be a great way to see the work she was accomplishing and see what the children in schools were learning about and possibly seeing for the first time.

Lead

Cora Johnstone Best was an American mountaineer. She summitted peaks all over the world and paved the way for more women to join the sport. She took pictures and videos of her summits which she shared with as many people as she could from children in schools to adults interested in mountaineering. Best was also a doctor and advocated for children to be more active in schools.

In the actual article there is a second woman in the title, Audrey Forfar Shippam. I cannot find any information about this woman besides the fact they mountaineered together. I think because of the lack of information her name should be deleted from the title.

Early Life

Cora Johnstone Best was born in Mantorville, Minnesota. Her mother taught her when she was young, but she continued her education in schools and with tutors up into college. Her first lesson was in visual education which she would later use in her work. later became a medical doctor. She and her husband, Dr. Robert Best, ran a private hospital in Minneapolis whose work included medical care for Native American children. (I cannot find sources to show she worked in a hospital) Their home in Minneapolis, "Sundance Lodge", became a meeting place for outdoor enthusiasts, poets, and scientists. Best was a public speaker as early as 1918 and an advocate for physical education in schools.

After Best's death there is little record of Shippam's life or work continuing. The video and slides used in lectures from the pairs expeditions are gone.

The paragraph above is taken from the article, my edits are bolded. I want to clear up the timeline of her life because she accomplished a lot of different things. Between becoming a doctor, mountaineering, and education of children, with lots of different parts to all of those topics it gets a bit confusing. I also believe that since this paragraph is an overview of her life as a whole it should not be labeled 'Early Life', unsure of what to name it however.

Mountaineering

Though Best and Shippam faced many challenges these women had many accomplishments. They were the first females to ascend many mountains, they completed first ascents for other peaks, and were the first women to lead expeditions on many summits.

Best was given lifetime memberships in the American, Canadian, Japanese, British, and Swiss Alpine Clubs. This was due to the number of achievements Best had received and impact she had on the mountaineering community. Because of the impacts Best had on the sport she was given special privileges to explore national parks in the United States and Canada.

For this section there is a lot of good information about the trips Best took. It it lacking information on her starting the mountaineering club in the united states and bringing the sport into the US which I think is important to note.

Advocation

Cora Johnstone Best taught lectures in the offseason of mountain climbing in the later years of her life. She forgo her medical career to pursue this passion full time. These lectures were taught for free in hopes to increase public health by nature. Her motto when discussing public health and trying to stop obesity was "the longer the belt, the shorter the life". Best liked to share her achievements and the trills of being an adventurer with everyone she could. This led her to preform these lectures in all sorts of places including churches, high schools, universities, hotels, and more. The subject matter of the lectures were exploits from her accents and journeys, using slides and videos of her and Shippam's travels. During this time Best would contribute to the Bureau of Commercial Economics. She became a representative of the BCE due to the videographic work done by the women on these expeditions which were used to promote conservation. With the conservation of parks Best also made a stand for equal access to parks for all people.

Best and Shippam were some of the founding member of the Trail Riders of Canadian Rockies in which advocation of equal rights was a principle in which they made decisions by. The Trail Riders club were an influential group of people from many walks of life including cowboys, poets, artists, and intellectuals. They both served in leadership roles while a part of this club. Logging over 2,500 miles with this group, they became the first to paddle the 200 miles of the Big Bend, an area of white water on the Columbia River in Canada. The principles of equality were shown by not having biases towards accepting any person into the club for any reason including: race, color, age, or profession. Best continued to show her commitment to these principles in her work and life. Best was an advocate for including Japanese mountaineers in the ACC during a time in which this group faced heavy discrimination.

During her mountaineering the sport was male dominated. When climbing there was pressure on her about being a woman mountaineer. Through this she continued to be a voice for women in the sport. This also went against social norms in a public way. She did this by rebutting reporter questions about her husbands control over her. Best also publicly stated that women can experience and complete the same things that men can. Some examples of challenges the women faced during these times includes female names being left off of expedition lists and views of women being disciplined for wearing mountaineering pants.

I want to add this section because Best was a big advocator for children learning and being able to be active. Add information about her going to schools to spread education about mountaineering and nature from her works of motion pictures. She regularly went to schools to teach children and used pictures and video she would take from her own expeditions.

All bolded information has been added by me to the main article

References

Has information about her parents and education. And her large accomplishments later in life including taking videos and pictures of mountains and using them to teach children. She was a well known mountain climber and brought the sport into Minnesota.

This is a compilation of articles written by lots of different leaders of visual practices. Cora Johnstone helped compile this articles and wrote one of her own. Her article is Bringing Nature Into the Schoolroom By Means of Pictures. (pg137)