- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Bruxton talk 15:34, 29 December 2023 (UTC)
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Al Treml
... that Al Treml, the video director for the Green Bay Packers for 36 years, was trained in photography while in the United States Army?Source: "Treml began his career in the Army when he attended Fort Monmouth's photo school and was an Army photographer in France from 1955-1959."- ALT1:
... that before filming National Football League games, former Green Bay Packers video director Al Treml was a United States Army photographer stationed in France?Source: "Treml began his career in the Army when he attended Fort Monmouth's photo school and was an Army photographer in France from 1955-1959." - ALT2:
... that Al Treml, the video director for the Green Bay Packers for 34 years, was trained in photography while in the United States Army?Source: "Treml began his career in the Army when he attended Fort Monmouth's photo school and was an Army photographer in France from 1955-1959." - ALT3: ... that before filming National Football League games, former Green Bay Packers video director Al Treml was trained in photography while in the United States Army? Source: "Treml began his career in the Army when he attended Fort Monmouth's photo school and was an Army photographer in France from 1955-1959."
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Moved to mainspace by Gonzo fan2007 (talk). Self-nominated at 22:44, 12 December 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Al Treml; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
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- Bagumba, fixed in the article and in ALT2. Although, at this point I actually probably prefer ALT1. Thoughts? « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:25, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
- Gonzo fan2007: I was leaning toward ALT2, thinking a civilian reading it might not expect photography to be a skill learned while in the military. What do you feel is ALT1's selling point?—Bagumba (talk) 14:42, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
- Bagumba, I am fine with either. ALT1 just sounds smoother to me, but fine with whichever one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:37, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
- @Gonzo fan2007: What if you took ALT1's start of "that before filming National Football League games, former Green Bay Packers video director Al Treml was" along with ALT2's ending, "trained in photography while in the United States Army?". Is that any smoother?—Bagumba (talk) 17:20, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
- Bagumba, I like it. Added ALT3. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:38, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
- @Gonzo fan2007: What if you took ALT1's start of "that before filming National Football League games, former Green Bay Packers video director Al Treml was" along with ALT2's ending, "trained in photography while in the United States Army?". Is that any smoother?—Bagumba (talk) 17:20, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
- Bagumba, I am fine with either. ALT1 just sounds smoother to me, but fine with whichever one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:37, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
- Gonzo fan2007: I was leaning toward ALT2, thinking a civilian reading it might not expect photography to be a skill learned while in the military. What do you feel is ALT1's selling point?—Bagumba (talk) 14:42, 21 December 2023 (UTC)
